Jasmine Hart

Yay! Ahem. Hi Kit.I enjoyed this, as usual, nice and fresh. The beginning is great, very interesting, really drew me in. I'd suggest a question mark after "hole", or else ...

Hi, I think you have an interesting idea here. I'm really interested in your mention of the kestrel and the rabbit. I'd make that the poem instead of what follows, ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. You manage the form really well. I love the imagery of the leaf falling. I think you're right that the last line of the first ...

Hi, I'm Jas. Welcome to YWS! I love the bubble image, it's vivid and works very effectively. I'd change the title to; "I Can't Be Who I'm Not", or to ...

Hey. I wrote an article on this a while back-it's in the knowledge base. :)

Sounds like a plan to me. :)

Hi, I'm Jas and I'll be your reviewer this evening. I'm going to do this in two sections; the first will address what you have here, and the second will ...

Thanks everyone! You're right, Stella, I've made a few little changes in accordance with your suggestions.

Hi Penguin, I really like this, Your imagery is vivid and interesting and I love how "cooling" and "decay" work together. I love; "and I wonder why she doesn’t fit." ...

*I wrote this for a competition a while back and it had to be under eight-hundred words, which is why this is so short. Any tips on how to improve ...

Hi Snoink. I really enjoyed this, but what else is new? It starts well. I love the ominous sense which the first line creates. I love; "it slunk past the ...

Hi Smorgishborg, I really enjoyed this. It's very clever! The provocative first stanza is very effective. I love "Earnest bread", and the detail with which you describe the sandwich-making. I ...

Congratulations greeters! And well done to all four participants. :)

Haha. I really like this. I love the repetition of "I don't get it", and also; "You used that word 10 times". I also love; "Shhhh, while she’s reading", but ...

Hi. Welcome to YWS! I really like this. My favourite lines are; "I hacked you open to see the cold watery swamp icing you dead." and "Blueberry moon-like, you are ...